tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post9130660675218571682..comments2024-02-16T02:36:52.258-06:00Comments on 52 Book Reviews: Terrible Minds Flash Fiction Challenge: The Jackdaw's Wire & Lessons LearnedAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18225688194550955358noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-1590296945442136322014-12-31T01:09:47.771-06:002014-12-31T01:09:47.771-06:00Very Interesting post. very Nice I am very happy t...Very Interesting post. very Nice I am very happy to Read this post.. <a href="http://www.mageewp.com" rel="nofollow">Wordpress blog themes</a> Thanks Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12383331048709446070noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-17384914638967987882014-01-15T10:49:44.705-06:002014-01-15T10:49:44.705-06:00Sian,
I appreciate the feedback. I was worried a...Sian, <br /><br />I appreciate the feedback. I was worried about the info dumping in the beginning but couldn't see a way clear in such little space. I was definitely trying to insert a decent amount of plot, rather than leaving things open ended and nebulous which is so common in flash. Thanks again for picking up what I was putting down. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18225688194550955358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-24557351344475979152014-01-15T10:47:51.162-06:002014-01-15T10:47:51.162-06:00AJ-
Thanks for your comments. In retrospect, I a...AJ- <br /><br />Thanks for your comments. In retrospect, I agree the sudden weeping would have benefited from a more subtle approach but word count restraints made that harder than I'd anticipated. I may just revisit this setting and character another time. <br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18225688194550955358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-44166856209484683472014-01-15T10:45:19.025-06:002014-01-15T10:45:19.025-06:00Mark,
Thanks for stopping by and reading. I'...Mark, <br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and reading. I'm still working on finding that consistency of voice that I imagine will make certain phrasings seem less jarring. But as you've noted, I haven't got there just yet. <br /><br />I'm really looking forward to this week's challenge. <br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18225688194550955358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-24829053790801200772014-01-13T04:19:35.803-06:002014-01-13T04:19:35.803-06:00I enjoyed this, and I thought the symmetry was wel...I enjoyed this, and I thought the symmetry was well played. Some of the flash fiction pieces have felt more description than story, but I think your's avoided that quite well.<br /><br />I did feel the start was a little info-dumpy, and had to push on through it. Other than that, it was really good. You character's voice pulled me right in.<br /><br />Sianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04150396669537102331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-62655784681853644812014-01-12T23:37:42.698-06:002014-01-12T23:37:42.698-06:00Hi! I nominated you for the Liebster Award. It’s a...Hi! I nominated you for the Liebster Award. It’s an award given out to promote new blogs. You got my vote because I thought your recent flash fiction was great. Check it out at http://ajbauers.blogspot.com/2014/01/liebster-award.htmlJanelle Reynoldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16143472121513219346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-67297654210888720262014-01-11T22:43:44.924-06:002014-01-11T22:43:44.924-06:00I really enjoyed the setting of this piece like Ma...I really enjoyed the setting of this piece like Mark - the idea of chained Gods and priests provoke an evocative image. Intriguing storyline as well. I'm glad he felt remorse for the priest, but instead of going straight to weeping, I think a more subtle display of sorrow would have been more gripping - maybe even relating back to the last sentence of your first paragraph?<br /><br />But overall, good piece - it's a world I'd continue to visit :)Janelle Reynoldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16143472121513219346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-30532794815806842922014-01-11T07:15:51.361-06:002014-01-11T07:15:51.361-06:00I enjoyed your story. Especially the setting and p...I enjoyed your story. Especially the setting and pace. Every bit was believable. Unlike nick, however, I didn't like the turns of phrase. I found them distracting. Following the story wasn't an issue, but on a few of those turns, I had to reread those sentences to make sure I understood. It slowed down the narrative slightly. When I reread the story in its entirety, everything was just fine.<br />Take my comments as you will. They are not meant to discourage, but to encourage you next week.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06895646456052576860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-7838696644956382602014-01-10T20:28:52.682-06:002014-01-10T20:28:52.682-06:00Nick,
I wasn't aware of the Malazan connecti...Nick, <br /><br />I wasn't aware of the Malazan connection. In fact, that was a last minute addition when I realized I hadn't tied the wire reference from the random title in very well. <br /><br />But the other bit about Mark Lawrence, that made my damn night. <br /><br />Thanks for reading. <br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18225688194550955358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-177707387376857273.post-24900480655407372742014-01-10T20:07:42.746-06:002014-01-10T20:07:42.746-06:00I enjoyed some of your turn of phrase in this piec...I enjoyed some of your turn of phrase in this piece; the murdering of the sneeze, theft having a price but not knowing when the bill would come due, the priest's life being used as coinage for a better life. Some of the phrasing reminds me of Mark Lawrence, which you should take as a high praise, as big a fan of his prose as I am.<br /><br />The Chained God bit threw me off a little, but simply because that's a major player in the Malazan series which I'm freshly off of.<br /><br />You know I'm not a big short story guy because I have a hard time getting a feel for a setting with such small amounts of verbiage, so I'll leave commentary on the setting to someone who can better express their view on that topic.Nickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05412702150749211609noreply@blogger.com